Hi Liz, I have written a response to this question without reading the model essay. Could you please tell me which band I am likely to secure? And any suggestions please?
Completion of higher education is considered as a vital step for one’s professional progression. Anyhow, getting skilled and experienced in various fields is also detrimental for professional grooming and economic independence. In my opinion, some practical skills must be attained by students during their educational journey but they must complete their university education first in order to get ensured economic stability later on and shouldn’t be relying wholly upon soft skills. These additional skills must be seen as a top up in their career building.
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on my professional accomplishments as a teacher.
I have been a language teacher for over 12 years. (I’m not that old, though haha. I’ll be 31 this year). Teaching English among Asian students is a very rewarding experience, thus the desire to master the language myself is of significant part of my professional development – if I were to be true to this profession.